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Tuesday, February 2, 2010

Short and not so sweet

Butterfly

Love,
when did your tender
regard harden into this
chrysallis
from which only you
will emerge perfect?


What do you think?  Longer or is it good?  Frankly, I like it short and punchy.  This was inspired by the movie: Hope Floats.

-Wendy

3 comments:

I Love Baby Quilts! said...

I love it!

Duff said...

it works on figurative and literal levels--I vote no changes. I really like it! Feels like you've been reading Austen or Bronte sisters? Perhaps Keats for the sense of longing?
:O)

Joanne said...

Sounds great. Love "Hope Floats".

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